CHAPTER 1: GREAT ESCAPE

You have certainly improved since last critique.
Most importantly, you have integrated your character into the team and made them much more attached/invested emotionally. This is crucial in any story, and I congratulate you. I would strongly encourage you to keep working at this, as I see it as the only setback in your writing: at least for RP. Remember that your team member interaction and investment is what will make or break your writing here, due to the very nature of collaborative writing. Make them important in your characters' life, and it will not only make the story better, but also help your character grow.

You had some nice use of metaphor and simile, and excellent characterization of a child. It was interesting to see how a young one would react in the face of the apocalypse, and you captured it well. As always, you're very descriptive, but sometimes your grammar was lacking, or your sentences didn't flow as they should.
I'd suggest the writing editor I've linked previously to fix simple things like that.
Remember that you want to say the most you can with as little words as possible. Research a bit on sentence structure and how to avoid a passive voice.
I also liked your pacing; the way Taphs' story ended was great, and it left me wanting to know more about what he's going through, and what will happen to him now.
That is exactly what you want from your readers.

After taking all this into consideration, we've decided that you are ready for a harder challenge.

Congratulations Kaze, you've graduated to Ace Rank!
You can now join an Ace team, either with Taph or with anyone else you choose. Taph can keep his post count, wherever he goes.
You also earned an element badge, which you can collect at the League. Just link this post, and they will do the rest.

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You have also improved vastly since my last critique. You took to what I suggested right away, and set to work in improving. That alone is a great feat, and the sign of ambition, an attentive listener and a passionate writer. Taking constructive criticism with a positive attitude and using it to your benefit is an invaluable skill, and one you can use everywhere.

I'm very impressed with how much you've improved in visually expressing yourself. Your writing style has certainly made leaps and bounds. Interaction between characters was spot on; I loved how much your character reacted to the others. That's a show of excellent RP skills. Your spelling and grammar were decent, but I'd suggest trying to expand your vocabulary. Try pushing outside of your comfort zone, and use a more complex sentence structure. Research ways on how to make your writing dynamic, and less passive.
Subtlety is also something that can be worked at. The reader gets more from your writing if you show, and not tell. Let them see that your character is determined, don't tell them that she is.
Let them decide what they feel and understand, and your reader will pull much more from your work. They'll be much more emotionally invested, because they are actively thinking about it, rather than being told how to feel.

Also refrain from making your writing sound like a conversation between reader and writer, unless it fits your medium. In the case of RP, it doesn't fit. This form of writing is usually meant to be third person perspective, without an active narrative voice. Engross your readers through the senses, not by talking to them. 

I would also like you to apply subtlety to dialogue.
Really research dialogue tips, and how to make it more subtle and more realistic.
The only shortcoming I saw that didn't improve as much as I'd like is how she spoke.
And while this may be her character/personality, I still think it could do with some more refinement.
A quick google search of 'dialogue for writing' came up with a slew of helpful links.
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The best advice I can give is to read your dialogue out loud. Would someone really say that in real life? If not, then change it so it does. If your character is saying something too obvious, you need to change that. Obviously, they're saying it for a reason, and you want it in there- but instead of putting it in speech dialogue, maybe include it in thought dialogue instead. Or if possible, show it through action.
And honestly, if it's much too blunt or simple, take it out entirely.
Think about the situation, and how much is already implied by a characters' words or actions. Some things just don't need to be pointed out.
Assume that your reader already picked up on certain things, and imply them through how your character reacts, rather than saying it bluntly.
The whole point is to immerse your reader into a believable world- and unrealistic dialogue takes a reader out completely.

Finally, I would suggest improving your character depth. 
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Here's a character sheet that has a lot of questions about your character. Fill out as much as you can- it will help you flesh them out and help you learn about who your character is.
Do your utmost to avoid Mary Sues, or super-special characters.
Most people don't look exceptionally unique, so why should Pokemon be any different? What makes them unique is on the inside. Make them a strong/quality character, and only take physical appearance as a conduit. 

Here's a test of sorts that you can do to see if your character is a Mary Sue:
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Again, don't worry if it happens; this type of thing is common. But be sure to look at all the things that contribute to that type of character and try to avoid the ones that would count against a deep character. 
The worst thing about this type of char is that it's two-dimensional.
You don't want your character to be perfect in every way and everyone loves them and they're super-special. 
Remember that this has to be a real personality, and everyone; literally everyone- has a LOT of flaws. 
If you want people to relate and appreciate your work, you don't have to make something super-beautiful/strong.
Make something real. 


After taking all this into consideration, we've decided that you are ready for a harder challenge.

Congratulations Duma, you've graduated to Ace Rank!
You can now join an Ace team, either with Glass or with anyone else you choose. Glass can keep her post count, wherever she goes.
You also earned an element badge, which you can collect at the League. Just link this post, and they will do the rest.

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You've shown some improvement as well since my last critique- your pacing has improved. 
You slowed down and really got your character much more involved, which made the story flow much better.
Your characterization did improve; you used less dialogue and more descriptive text to describe what Mathias was doing or thinking, which is good. However, this still needs to be improved upon. There's still a lot of direct characterization in your posts.
The same issue I found in Dumas' posts- writing like you're talking to your reader, or explaining things in direct ways. This is the core of the issue, and needs to be addressed right away.
In RP, your perspective as narrator should be in third-person point of view, and should be a passive narrative voice. Your reader should be focusing in the characters involved, and should be gleaning their reactions, emotions, etc from the characters themselves, and not from the narrator.
Writing too bluntly will keep your readers from really staying engaged in your writing, as you've already made all the deductions for them. 
Here's a link to some helpful tips on how to be more visual:
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You want them to feel emotionally attached to your characters, which brings me to the next issue. I believe that your character wasn't developed enough, which may be why you're having issues. Don't feel bad, it happens to everyone here. Creating characters from scratch is often a very difficult process, and usually requires a test-run before you even know if you like to RP as them. 
Sometimes, it's just gonna be too hard to get into character, and have to rework them or start over with another.
Mathias has a decent start for a good character, but he had no real motive or complexity to him.
He was kind and compassionate, but that was all that was really seen in the story; and for a character to become real, you have to convey much more than that. 
His profile sheet also lacked in depth; motives, a complex history, conflict.

So to help ask the right questions on developing your character, I found a pretty nice character template.
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While this may apply to humans, take the questions that apply most and input whatever you can for your character. This will help you really get into his head; all the questions asked are things that you can potentially put into your writing to make him more realistic. And you'll get to know your character better, which is always a good thing. 

And here's a helpful link on the quick and dirty;
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These are all things that you can apply to your work, some of them I've mentioned above.

Taking all of this into account, I regret to say that you are not ready for Ace teams. 
However, you have earned a 25 post element badge for Mathias. Link this post in the League as proof, and they will do the rest. 

For the next round, I'd suggest that you start with a fresh character, to not only maximize your badge earnings, but so you can really flesh out an unused idea/character with the things I've suggested.